Editing Guidelines
Editing Guidelines
To encourage the development of young editors, we have produced this booklet to serve as a guide to the expectations of news publications around the country. These guidelines are based on materials culled from newspaper tests and the stated expectations of those newspapers. We hope students, professorsand others interested in the training of copy editors will use this bookletto learn what newspapers seek when hiring copy editors.
Please note: doing well on the material in this booklet does not guarantee you a job at one of these publications or any other.This booklet is only a guide to the kinds of skills needed to work in a newsroom.They do not constitute standards by which all newspapers or other publicationsoperate. Also, keep in mind that all answers are correct as of March2000, but answers to current events questions could change.
ACES was formed in the spring of 1997, for and by copy editors. The organization has many roots, growing out of meetings sponsored by the American Society of Newspaper Editors, meetings of editors at newspapers in the Southeast,and the desire of many others to address copy-editing issues.
The following newspapers contributed to this booklet:
Arizona Republic
Baltimore Sun
Cincinnati Enquirer
Dallas Morning News
Detroit Free Press
Ft. Worth Star-Telegram
Greensboro News & Record
The Hartford Courant
Houston Chronicle
Idaho Statesman
Los Angeles Times
Milwaukee Journal Sentinel
Minneapolis Star-Tribune
Philadelphia Inquirer
St. Petersburg Times
San Jose Mercury News
Seattle Times
Winston Salem-Journal
For more on ACES, including membership and scholarship
information, visit
www.copydesk.org or call 1-800-393-7681.
This project was the work of numerous editors who contributed
material, re-edited, checked facts and eliminated redundancies.
Final editing and the heavy lifting of production were
handled by Mary Frances Monckton Hendrix of The
Augusta Chronicle in Augusta, Ga.
Contact her for suggestions, questions or corrections.
(Please note that page numbers refer to the printed version).
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Spelling
Part 1
Choose the correct spelling of each word.
1. hemorrhage, hemmorhage
2. embarrass, embarass
3. consensus, concensus
4. drunkeness, drunkenness
5. sheriff, sherriff
6. privilege, privelege
7. fraudulant, fraudulent
8. restauranteur, restaurateur
9. accomodate, accommodate
10. liquefy, liquify
11. committment, commitment
12. harass, harrass
13. prerogative, perogative
14. alright, all right
15. inoculate, innoculate
16. seize, sieze
17. ecstasy, ecstacy
18. bellweather, bellwether
19. Caribbean, Carribean
20. parallel, paralell
21. weird, wierd
22. fairwell, farewell
23. adrress, address
24. achieve, acheive
25. manageable, managable
Answer key to Part 1, page 35
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Spelling
Part 2
Write the correct spelling of each word or name (some
may be correct; if so, write “correct”).
1. defendent
2. affadavit
3. calendar
4. dillettante
5. parenthises
6. chaffeur
7. sinusitus
8. batallion
9. judgement
10. occurred
11. subpeona
12. Phillippines
13. seperate
14. occasion
15. barbiturate
16. exhillarate
17. salacious
18. liaison
19. osteoporosis
20. Cincinnatti
Answer key to Part 2, page 35
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General Knowledge
Part 3 — Identification
Identify these acronyms:
1. NATO
2. NASA
3. ATM
4. NYSE
5. EPA
6. IRS
7. DEA
8. AFL-CIO
9. UNHCR
10. CDC
11. ATF
12. ACLU
13. DNC
14. HUD
15. EEOC
16. NAACP
17. GAO
18. NTSB
19. FEMA
20. OSHA
21. NOW
22. NRA
23. OPEC
24. RAM
25. WTO
Answer key to Part 3, page 36
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Part 4 — Identification
Identify these personalities in arts and
entertainment:
1. Toni Morrison
2. Selena
3. Frank Sinatra
4. Frank Capra
5. Herman Melville
6. Pierre-Auguste Renoir
7. Maya Angelou
8. Jodie Foster
9. Nat King Cole
10. Lauryn Hill
11. Leonard Bernstein
12. Sylvia Plath
13. J.D. Salinger
14. Garry Trudeau
15. Roberto Benigni
16. Spike Lee
17. Rita Moreno
18. Georgia O’Keeffe
19. Patsy Cline
20. Alfred Hitchcock
21. Billie Holiday
22. Salvador Dali
23. Octavio Paz
24. Theodore Geisel
25. Pearl Buck
Answer key to Part 4, page 36
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Part 5 — Identification
Identify these political figures (officeholders,
activists, national leaders):
1. Henry Shelton
2. Bruce Babbitt
3. David Satcher
4. Madeleine Albright
5. Maxine Waters
6. Dennis Hastert
7. Henry Hyde
8. Elizabeth Dole
9. Togo West
10. George W. Bush
11. Kweisi Mfume
12. William Rehnquist
13. Dianne Feinstein
14. Louis Freeh
15. Jesse Helms
16. Robert Rubin
17. Trent Lott
18. Bill Bradley
19. Martin Luther King Jr.
20. Ben Nighthorse Campbell
Answer key to Part 5, page 37
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Part 6 — Identification
Identify these international figures:
1. Tony Blair
2. Slobodan Milosevic
3. Saddam Hussein
4. Boris Yeltsin
5. Gerry Adams
6. Nelson Mandela
7. Benjamin Netanyahu
8. Osama bin Laden
9. King Abdullah
10. Jiang Zemin
11. Mikhail Gorbachev
12. Jacques Chirac
13. Yasser Arafat
14. Kofi Annan
15. Elie Wiesel
Answer key to Part 6, page 38
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Part 7 — Identification
Identify these figures in the sciences, math and
health:
1. Sigmund Freud
2. J. Robert Oppenheimer
3. Albert Einstein
4. Max K.E.L. Planck
5. Marie Curie
6. Thomas Edison
7. Louis Pasteur
8. George Washington Carver
9. Jonas Salk
10. Edmund Halley
11. Alexander Graham Bell
12. Albert Claude
13. Galileo Galilei
14. Jerome Lejeune
15. Charles Darwin
Answer key to Part 7, page 38
Part 8 — Identification
Identify the following sports figures:
1. Jackie Robinson
2. Steffi Graf
3. Arnold Palmer
4. Michael Jordan
5. Joe DiMaggio
6. Tiger Woods
7. Muhammad Ali
8. Jeff Gordon
9. Arthur Ashe
10. Katarina Witt
11. Mark McGwire
12. Jesse Owens
13. Willie Shoemaker
14. Pele
15. Florence Griffith Joyner
Answer key to Part 8, page 38
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Part 9
Historic dates:
1. What is the significance of June 6, 1944?
2. What happened on July 4, 1776?
3. What is the significance of April 14, 1865?
4. What happened Dec. 7, 1941?
5. What is the significance of Nov. 22, 1963?
6. What happened on Aug. 9, 1974?
7. What is the significance of Jan. 28, 1986?
8. What happened April 19, 1995?
9. What is the significance of Aug.6 and Aug. 9,
1945?
10. What happened Feb. 20, 1962?
Answer key to Part 9, page 39
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Part 10 — General Knowledge and Current Affairs
1. In newspaper style, when are months abbreviated?
2. Who wrote: “Tender is theNight,”
“Moby Dick,”
“The Scarlett Letter,”
“Main Street,”
“Sister Carrie,” and
“The Last of the Mohicans” ?
3. What is Associated Press style for the
Labour/Labor Party in Britain? Who is its leader?
4. Who is the prime minister of Canada?
5. Who is the U.S. secretaryof state?
6. Who is the chief justice of the U.S. Supreme
Court?
7. Who succeeds the presidency if both the president
and vice president should die in office?
8. How many members are in the Senate?
The House of Representatives?
9. Is the lessee the one whopays the rent or the one
who receives it?
10. Which is longer, a meteror a yard?
11. What amendment to the Constitution is designed to
guarantee a fair trial?
12. Name as many of the seven dwarves as you can.
13. What is the significanceof June 6, 1944.
14. The battle of Gettysburgwas fought in 1777,
1812, 1848, 1863, 1898?
15. If a story contains no names, it can/cannot be
libelous?
16. How many items are in a baker’s dozen?
17. What does the term ThirdWorld mean?
18. Name the three branches of the U.S. government.
19. Who was Ernie Pyle?
20. From where are the Pulitzer Prizes
administered/distributed?
21. What are blue laws?
22. What is a sacred cow in newspaper parlance?
23. Describe what the prime rate is.
24. What is libel?
25. What is gerrymandering?
26. Which is more serious, amisdemeanor or a felony?
27. J. Paul Getty made his money in what business?
28. List the capital cities of _______________, New
York; , Oregon;
_____________, North Carolina; _____________, Texas;
, Missouri?
29. What event triggered theMay 1992 riots in Los
Angeles?
30. Name at least three scandals that have plagued
President Clinton’s administration.
31. Who was Anne Frank?
32. Name three prominent people who have died of
AIDS. What do AIDS and HIV stand for?
How is it spread?
33. Name the person who wrote “Cannery Row,” “The
Grapes of Wrath” and “Of Mice and Men.”
34. Name the site of the infamous crackdown on
dissenters in China.
35. Who is Eric Rudolph?
36. These cities are the capitals of what countries?
Amman
Buenos Aires
Vienna
Ottawa
Lisbon
Tehran
37. What is the Enola Gay?
38. What was Reconstruction?
39. Who is the founder of Microsoft?
40. What is glasnost?
Answer key to Part 10, page 39
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Math
Part 11
Use a calculator to figure the following. Round
percentage results to the nearest 0.1.
1. The budget grew from $725,000 last year to
$900,000 this year, an increase of ______percent.
2. The number of passengers using the airport
declined _____ percent, from 50.2 million in 1993 to
46.6 million in 1994.
3. The price fell exactly 60 percent last week, from
$31.50 to $_____.
4. The amendment requires approval from at least
two-thirds of the 82-member state Senate, or at least
_____ votes.
5. The graduation rate rose from 77 percent last year
to 84 percent this year, a gain of _____.
6. If a story said, “The number of women in severely
reduced circumstances as a result of being displaced
as homemakers has increased fourfold in the past 15
years,” would a headline that said, “Displaced
homemaker rolls up 400%” be accurate? ____ Why? __
7. There has been an increase in state funding to
public libraries to $120 million, a fourfold increase
from the present $40 million. What’s wrong with these
figures?
8. The number of cases hadreached 74, and the death
toll had reached 20. What disturbed him most was the
mortality rate among those afflicted: almost 29
percent. What’s wrong with this sentence?
9. State policy once was the juggernaut of school
consolidation; during the 1960s the number of
Minnesota school districts dropped a stunning 540
percent, from 2,410 to 446. What’s wrong with this
sentence?
10. CBS had a 6.2 rating/13 share, 1 percent higher
than the 6.1/14 from last year. What’s wrong with this
sentence?
Answer key to Part 11, page 41
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Editing
Part 12 — Paragraphs
Edit these paragraphs, which contain problems of fact
and require news judgment:
1. An 11-year-old boy fishing from a railroad bridge
tried to outrun an oncoming freight train, but was
decapitated, authorities said.
2. A 2-year-old boy was injured when he fell into
some hot ashes at a campfire during a family outing in the Withlacoochee Forest.
Police were not releasing the name of the injured boy
because of his age.
3. When Brooksville policeDetective Earl Hannaway
arrived, the trembling dog was still alive. Steam
wafted from its burned body, the report stated.
However, it died within minutes, the report said.
4. Glenn Edward Sheridan, 14, was charged with grand
theft, and Jerome Michael Sullivan, also 14, was
charged with being an accessory after the fact. The
two took a Chevrolet belonging to Sheridan’s mother,
after having an extra set of keys made, said
Smithville Sheriff’s Office spokesman Jon Powers.
5. The boy was electrocuted as he climbed through the
branches of the tree while trying to rescue his cat.
He was listed in stable condition at Bayfront Medical
Center on Thursday.
6. A man who exposed himself to three young people
while standing on a street corner last week has been arrested. Sean Peter Benoit,
27, was charged with three counts of lewd and
lascivious behavior.
7. The 56-year-old Heppner, who said he had just
retired from an influential job with the Defense
Department, said he talked with a high-powered lawyer
in Washington who thought the Indian Shores resident’s
case had a good chance in court.
8. Each morning — often just as the sun is rising
over Southside — employees of the National Weather
Service station at Dunlap walk outside their building
and release a gas-filled balloon. Twelve hours after
that balloon goes up — at midnight — another balloon
will be released.
9. Gov. Bob Smith looked far and wide for the perfect
new hostess for the governor’s mansion — and finally found her sleepingin
the same bed with his top political adviser.
10. Althea Andersen might be the only streetwalker
whose skirt goes below her knees. A librarian for 40
years, she has gray hair, a straw hat and a sweet
sales pitch. With her help, the North Greenwood branch
of the Smithville Public Library is taking its job
into new territory — door to door.
11. The Chambers of Commerce of Dakota, Lucas
Heights, Greenville and Westchester will join to
sponsor a women’s symposium and trade show — yes,
apparently the two can be combined — on Salt Lake
Beach Tuesday.
12. A 35-year-old Lawrence man was arrested Thursday
and charged with sexually abusing his 6-month-old
daughter. Henry P. Henry, of 242 Sunshine Lane, was
booked into the Lawrence County Jail, where he was
being held in lieu of $15,000 bail.
13. Deaf, dumb, illiterate, unable to communicate and
possibly retarded, Frank Hall sits in the West Chester
Detention Center while others ponder his fate.
14. After President Dwight T. Eisenhower took office,
the Democrats remained in control of the White House for the rest of the 50s.
15. The final nationally-televised debate in the west
European country was viewed by a 22-million member
audience nationwide, more than half of the 45 million
registered voters.
16. The plan to hire a pompom-waving squad to cheer
on the team was rejected by the committee, chairperson
Emily Morgan said. A well-dressed grandmother of four,
Morgan said the panel and the school board will
continue to evaluate its options.
17. When the accused killer entered the jail, the
sheriff was upset. Their is nowhere except up that
this scum can go now,” the lawman said.
18. The 11 children who won blue ribbons were beaming
as their names were called by the teacher, who was
handling out the awards. “Let’s give a round of
applause for Jason, Adam, Cheryl, Melissa, Mindy,
Jennifer, Tiffany, Bobby Joe, Sue Ellen and Hortense,”
the teacher said.
19. Police confiscated almost 10 pounds of cocaine
after firemen extinguished the blaze, Police Chief Tom
Sullivan declared. He added, We recovered at least 8
kilograms. That’s worth more than $40 billion on the
street.”
20. After a 13-year separation, Angel and her father,
Daniel Lawson, hugged ecstatically during a
long-awaited reunion. Mr. Lawson, 62, last saw his
daughter the night she was born, a rainy night of
sorrow in 1982.
Answer key to Part 12, page 42
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Part 13 — Sentences
Edit these sentences, keeping in mind spelling,
punctuation, grammar, style, word usage and wordiness,
as well as issues of fairness and libel.
1. I don’t know how to even begin editing these
sentences.
2. The general concensus of opinion was that the
house was the most unique in its class.
3. Lisa has a myriad of books, but never seems to
take the time to read then.
4. The asisstant who ordinarily is highly efficient,
was all thumbs in todays experiment.
5. Having evaluated the situation and the impact of
the new regulations upon the state’s current
educational system, it is obvious that the voters must
convince the legislature in Peoria to adopt reforms.
6. Volkswagon is only having trouble with one of
there 1983 models.
7. The copy editor’s will meet today.
8. The two bank robbery suspects fled and have not
been caught.
9. When only a small boy, my father took me with him
to Denver.
10. A new graduate course in comunications is being
introduced this semmester.
11. He wanted to know if the criteria was valid.
12. Seven famous astronauts returned to earth today.
13. Swinging from the utility poll, they saw the
remnant of a kit’s tale and some
tattered paper.
14. I feel nauseous when I thinkof the momento I
lost.
15. Rudolph Nuryev had danced for years before
succumbing to the urge to direct.
16. Floodwaters totaly destroyed the town despite the
fact that their was a floodwall completely surrounding
it.
17. She was diagnosed with cancer in June.
18. It looks like Juston will be hung for murder
despite his appealing to the governor.
19. There were three people in the car when it
collided with a tree, but none were injured.
20. Despite averse wether conditions, the first
annual cookout begins Sunday night
at 7 p.m.
21. The womens’ group cancelled the forum.
22. Geoffrey want to go, but changed his mind.
23. Only a woman who’s values are corrupt could like
that kind of men?
24. Prior to the meeting, the premiere inferred that
he would fire the Secretary of State.
25. Sir that’s a high-quality stereo at a bargain
basement price.
26. The late Mayor Joe Blow was murdered at about
11:15 p.m. Thursday night. The trial of the suspect in
the case, John Smith, is scheduled for February 28,
1990.
27. She said she was too young to remember the Viet
Nam war.
28. Golly-gee, I think I’ll go get some jello.
29. She was strangled to death in her bed.
30. The coach feels the team lost due to its beat
halfback having his leg broke in the first quarter.
31. His brother, whom he said was a alcaholic, threw
himself in front of a bus.
32. But, actually, all they are concerned about this
year is Thad making a smooth transition to the
major-league team.
33. Fernando is respectfulof Lynn’s contributions.
34. The oder of onion still persists because niether
of you have taken out the garbage.
35. Amanda said the volumeof noise caused by the
operation of the truck kept her awake during the
nighttime.
36. The people have a right to know everything about
whoever they elect. If they vote for someone whom
political leaders say is unreliable, then they deserve
what they get.
37. The letter did not signifacantly effect the
outcome.
38. In the pre-dawn light,he started pouring over
the old records.
39. Travelling across the U.S., it’s vastness
effected her.
40. The Vikings have less players but they all blok
like they should.
41. In Texas schools, the stress on grammer is
miniscule.
42. If a deer laid down inthe deep snow, a person
would have to get closer than ten feet prior to seeing
it.
43. The principle reason for the principals firing
was because he behaved wierd.
44. Addie found a large number of people sitting
around.
45. Seattle police have arrested a 25-year-old
drifter for killing an East Side waitress. Charges
will be filed later.
46. According to police records, the suspect was
driven by taxi to the Texas Theater at 231 W.
Jefferson Blvd. on November 21, 1963, whereupon he
fled without paying his fare.
47. For a period of 10 days, workmen labored in
access of 12 hours daily to complete the new building.
48. The advance planning was completed by Paul on
Monday.
49. The story about the deaths of Elvis Pressley,
Bing Crosbee and Groucho Marks were written on April
Fool’s Day.
50. Leslie dropped by the automatic teller to
withdraw $10 on her way to work.
51. She was the wife of the late John Smith who died
in 1976.
52. The CIA was interestedin the activities of one
man: Copy editor Mike Jones.
53. Everyone of the clues,the officer said, led to
the apprehensions of the perpetrators.
54. Have you got a recieptfor clam chowder soup
which won't make me nauseous.
55. Attorney General Sam Johnson is committed to
investigating and prosecuting insurance fraud from
large-scale ripoffs to small nickle-and-dime claims.
56. The appelate court remaned the case back to
Sewanee county court.
57. Janie made reservations for Joe and I.
58. Its likely the body will lay in state til
Wednesday.
59. Jean Smith said she doesn’t understand the
state’s delay and that her daughter needs special
education from trained teachers, expert medical care
at home and is ready for physical therapy.
60. Written on expensive stationary, Jones tendered
his resignation after being
confronted with the evidence.
61. Mother Theresa was infamous for helping the
needy.
62. The group made the decision to leave early.
63. The enormity of the house is breathtaking, if you
stand in the middle of the living room the fireplace
is further than 10 yards away.
64. She wants to put a stop to the confusion prior to
the end of the meeting.
65. Susie did poor on the test, and afterward she
felt badly.
66. Pam literally jumped through the roof when we
surprised her.
67. According to police the self-confessed killer
lead them to the body.
68. Sick with the flu, thekleenex was Gina’s best
friend.
69. Kelly, Nancy and Cindyare all really different
than each other, but still get along good.
70. The dress’s are on sale today.
71. Who do you wish to see?
72. Rush-hour traffic to Chicago is grueling.
73. Jane is going to enform the persons in the
imediate vicinity of the leak to
evacuate.
74. For awhile after the organization’s leaders
learned what had transpired, they were speechless.
Hopefully, they will recover from their amazement
soon.
75. Texas is the second-biggest state in the
continental U.S.
76. Who shall I give the book to?
77. I’m going to give the band-aid to him,
irregardless of whether he needs it.
78. Janet expressed her willingness to do minor
tinkering with the contract offer.
79. At the present time, she has all of the children
with the exception of Anne.
80. The daylong crisis left every editor feeling
whipped, beaten, and worn to a frazzle.
81. She doesn’t like Hank staying out late.
82. John Jones, a good samaritan, is the man that
helped me.
83. The hospital is located at the corner of Seventh
Avenue and 14th Street.
84. This team, comprised of seven all-stars is
certanly different than the team of a couple years
ago.
85. The company’s workforce filed a class-action
lawsuit.
86. Some arrangements can be made for pretax
deductions.
87. We bought the house from Ebby Halliday, who had
been a realtor for as long as most area residents
could remember.
88. He ran out of the roomlike he had heard someone
yell “Fire!”
89. Georgia citizens wouldpay $64 for a drivers
license under the proposal.
90. The president looked happily as he took the oath
of office yesterday.
91. A good firemen learns to decsend down the poll
radiply.
92. Tom is in the process of moving downtown.
93. In view of the fact that the restaurant is no
longer excepting reservations, we can not eat their.
94. The editors were in attendance at the final
meeting.
95. I was late to work dueto car trouble.
96. Passover is a jewish holy day.
97. There were lyons on either side of the door.
98. Hurricane Alex caused the destruction of many
homes.
99. The Salvation army is a private agency.
100. Using the word “editor”give:
a. The plural possessive
b. The plural
c. The singular possessive
Answer key to Part 13, page 43
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Headline Writing
Part 14
1. Write a two-line, 18- to 22-count headline.
WASHINGTON — A compromise that would loosen flight
restrictions at Dallas Love Field received chilly
receptions Wednesday from airlines and one opponent of
the current limits.
Senate Majority Leader RobertDole proposed Tuesday
that airlines be allowed to fly from Love Field to any
other city as long as the flights land at least once
in Texas or four contiguous states.
That proposal would change the Wright amendment, a
federal law that since 1979 has not permitted flights
from Love Field to go beyond Texas, Louisiana,
Arkansas, New Mexico and Oklahoma.
Dole withdrew his proposal when Sens. Phil Gramm and
Lloyd Bentsen of Texas and others hustled to stop it —
but served notice he will continue pushing to change
the Wright amendment this fall.
Only Dallas-based Southwest Airlines Co., which tends
to have lower fares than its competitors, uses Love
Field. Cities and states just beyond the Wright
amendment borders, including Wichita, Kan., and
Memphis, Tenn., have pushed hard to repeal the limits
so they could attract Southwest.
Southwest conceded in a statement that repeal of the
amendment has the potential of “creating two competing
hub airports in the metroplex through dividing
long-haul, feed passenger traffic between the two
airports.”
It further stated that it is“amenable to any
modification of the Wright Amendment that benefits its
customers and is acceptable to all of the concerned
parties.”
American Airlines Inc., which has fought vigorously
against any attempt to change the Wright amendment,
said Wednesday that Sen. Dole’s compromise was no
compromise at all.
“It is not a minor change, American associate general
counsel David A. Schwarte said. “What you really do is
open up the entire United States and much of Central
America and Mexico to service out of Love Field on a
one-stop basis with no carrier even building a new
hub.”
From Love Field, Southwest could reach any airport in
its system with a single intermediary stop, and
Continental Airlines Inc. could cover most of its
system with a shop at its Houston hub, Mr. Schwarte
said.
American previously has saidit would split its
Dallas/Fort Worth International Airport hub and put
some 200 flights at Love Field, an action it said
would reduce
service to its customers.
“This is no gift,” Mr. Schwarte said of Sen. Dole’s
proposal. “It is a Trojan horse.”
Delta Air Lines Inc. spokesman Clay McConnell said
Delta, which is second in size at D/FW behind
American, doesn’t want to see the Wright amendment
altered either. The change would disrupt Delta’s
existing hub operations.
“We feel the way the Wright amendment currently reads
and operates is the way it ought to stay,” he said.
David Rucker, president of Associated Conservatives
of Texas and a fervent opponent of the Wright
amendment, criticized Sen. Dole’s proposal for not
going far enough.
“First of all, I consider ita bad law, and a bad law
changed in a compromise manner is still a bad law. In
my opinion, the Wright amendment has outlived its
usefulness and should be repealed in its entirety.
Anything less would be to continue a bad law,” said
Mr. Rucker, a member of the Coalition for the Repeal
of the Wright Amendment.
The issue comes up for a hearing before a House
Aviation subcommittee hearing Tuesday.
At present, Southwest is notsupposed to issue a
single ticket that will take a passenger from Dallas
to any point beyond the four adjoining states.
Travelers going beyond Texas,Oklahoma, Arkansas and
Louisiana must buy two tickets — one to the
intermediate airport and a second ticket from the
intermediate airport to their final destination. They
also must collect their bags from the first flight and
recheck them for the second flight.
2. Write a two-line, 18- to 22-count headline.
A Peoria semiconductor firm has squeezed the
processing of full-motion video onto a single
microchip, a development that may smooth the way for
increased use of television images on personal
computer screens.
Pixel Semiconductor Inc., a subsidiary of
St.Louis-based Cumulus Logic Inc., plans to unveil a
video processing chip, which supplants as many as six
separate chips, during the Comdex computer industry
trade show in October.
The chip, called a Video Window Generator, will allow
television images to appear on a wide variety of
desktop machines, including standard personal
computers, Apple Macintosh computers and workstations,
Pixel president Jim Fontaine said.
The chip uses signals from either U.S. or European
television standards that have been converted into a
data stream that can be displayed on computer screens.
The data can be resized at will, allowing the pictures
to appear in “windows” on personal computer or
workstation screens. To enlarge or reduce the size of
the image, a user will simply change the size of the
window, using a “mouse”-type pointing device.
Demand for such capabilitiesis increasing, as
personal computers become display devices for
teleconferences and the use of numbers, text and
simple graphics on screens gives way to “multimedia”
uses that incorporate video and audio as well.
The Pixel chip can process video at the equivalent of
250 million instructions a second, a “workhorse”
speed, Mr. Fontaine said. The ability to put critical
image-grabbing and processing tasks on a single chip
reduces the circuitry and board space needed to
provide personal computers with video capabilities.
In effect, a single-chip video processor could become
a simple addition to a personal computer, in the
fashion that math co-processors now are plugged in to
speed up numeric calculations, said Gerry Kaufhold, an
analyst at In-Stat Inc. in Tempe, Ariz.
If Pixel’s product proves toprovide such compact
video processing, he figures Pixel could move a
half-million units of the device in its first year and
a million in its second.
“The sky’s the limit after that,” said Mr. Kaufhold.
He noted, however, that while Pixel’s part is
potentially impressive, the product will face stiff
competition from electronics giants that include
Motorola Inc. and Philips N.V. Those firms currently
provide sets of chips that convert television images
into digits that computers can manipulate.
The Pixel parts start at $55apiece, in small
quantities.
Cumulus, based in St. Louis,Mo., bought controlling
interest in Pixel from Peoria-based Visual Information
Technologies Inc. in June.
3. Write a two-line, 13- to 16-count headline.
WASHINGTON — The TV industry abruptly broke off
negotiations Thursday on strengthening five-month-old
program ratings after Vice President Al Gore endorsed
labeling shows for violent content.
Accusing Gore of “unwarrantedintervention in the
process,” the major broadcasting, cable and motion
picture trade associations took the action as the
industry inched closer to adding codes for violence,
sex and crude language.
Earlier in the day, breakingthe administration’s
silence on possible changes in the ratings that took
effect Jan. 1, Gore declared, “We need a ‘V’ to tell
us when our youngest children could be exposed to
violence.”
4. Write a hammer head of one to five words, along
with a deck of four to seven words:
Hold the french fries — the monster chip is on its
way.
Genetic engineers in Germanyhave created a potato
big enough to feed a family of six. The potatoes were
created almost accidentally as part of a program to
investigate the breakdown of sugars in the tubers.
Although the world’s biggestpotato weighed in at 3.2
kilograms — without any genetic tinkering — the
engineered potatoes were on average two or three times
as large as the normal ones.
“The largest weighed 2 kilograms,”says Lothar
Willmitzer, head of the research team at the Max
Planck Institute.
Willmitzer and his colleaguessay they created the
huge vegetables by transferring a yeast gene into the
potato plants. The yeast, Saccharomyces cerevisiae, is
better known for its role in brewing and baking.
Answer key to Part 14, page 46
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Story Editing
Part 15
Edit these stories, keeping in mind spelling,
punctuation, grammar, style and wordiness, as well as
issues of fairness and libel. Paragraphs are numbered
to the left.
1.
JAMESVILLE — A Jamesville man was being held Thursday
on a $50,000 bond in Pocono jail after the car he was
driving struck another vehicle, killing a
passenger.
The passenger, Mildred Lenzi,76, of East Bay,
Washington, died at County Hospital after being flown
there by helicopter. Two Burlington residents were
seriously injured in the Wednesday night accident on
East Main Street.
Jamesville police said Lenziwas a passenger in a car
driven by Robert Bates, 60, of hamilton Avenue in
Burlington, who also was taken to County Hospital.
He was listed in serious condition late Thursday, a
hospital spokeswoman said. Bates’ wife, Edna, 80, was
taken to Charlotte Amalie Hospital where she also was
listed in serious condition.
No motor vehicle charges hadbeen flied against
Stephen J. DiMaria, 28, of Clearview Avenue though an
investigation was continuing. DiMaria was charged with
breach of peace for a domestic incident that occurred
Wednesday and was being held in Pocono jail in lieu of
$50,000 bond.
Police said DiMaria’s car was traveling east on East
Main Street when it entered the westbound lane and
struck Bates’ car. Both DiMaria and a passenger in his
car, Paula Dayfield, 30, of Greenridge Road, initially
refused medical treatment. But DiMaria was later
treated and released from Charlotte Amalie Hospital,
police
said.
The traffic fatality is the second in two days in the
city. On Tuesday, a 23-year-old Harwinton man was
killed after his motorcycle struck a telephone pole on
Harwinton Road, near East Main Street.
Answer key to Part 15, story 1, page 48
2.
Molly Jones was relieved to learn Monday night that
her missing husband was safe.
But she was not happy that she was going to have to
pick him up downtown because his car was the first one
confiscated under a new police program to discourage
the customers of prostitutes.
“I guess I’m glad to know he’s alive,” Jones, 30,
said of her husband, Desmond, 33, who committed an act
of gross indecency with a woman who had 14 previous
arrests for prostitution.
“Wait until I pick him up,” Jones said. I’ll wring
his neck.”
The new program was announcedMonday by Police Chief
John Darm. He said the new policy came about because
the community people demanded it,” referring to the
south side neighborhood that for years has seen large
numbers of Hispanic prostitutes.
Jones, a father of three girls who attend Watson
Elementary School, was arrested about 8:10 p.m. Monday
after an undercover police officer saw him flag down
Anna Stroll, park his car and engage in an act of
indecent and immoral conduct” with Stroll.
“I’m shocked,” his wife said. My husband is not the
type. He doesn’t drink. He never misses a day of
work.”
At a news conference about the new cost-effective
program, Darm, a Tom Cruise look-alike, smoothly
brushed aside a question about police entrapment.
Those arrested are flagrant violators, according to
court documents. Desmond Jones faces a maximum of a
month in jail.
Another police official, gesturing toward Jones, who
was waiting on a bench for his wife to arrive, said,
“This guy ought to know better than to pick up a
hitchhiker.”
Answer key to Part 15, story 2, page 48
3.
The mournful sound of Taps wafted over Calvary
Cemetery in Lewistown on Monday as family, friends and
thousands of law enforcement officers paid their last
respects to state trooper Timothy Bowe, gunned down
last weekend in rural Chisago County.
“I’ve played at every officers’funeral since Jerry
Haaf,” said Kevin Torgerson, an Edgerton County
sheriff’s deputy. “It’s very tough. I come to the
cemetery early. It takes a while to suck it up and
play.”
Earlier, troopers wept in their pews as Col. Mike
Chabries, chief of the state patrol, posthumously
awarded Bowe its first medal of honor and Gov. Jim
Harley eulogized Bowe as a hero.
Nearly 5,000 people, including 4,000 law enforcement
officers from throughout the metropolitan area and
around the state, jammed Epiphany Catholic Church and
spilled onto the grounds around it, making the funeral
the largest in the history of Blazing Rapids, fire
marshall John Piper said.
The seven-mile automobile procession up Hwy. 10 took
nearly an hour and a half, and hundreds of people
stood along roads or on overpasses, some holding signs
or waving flags, looking to get a glimpse of the 792
squad cars, many of them with flashing lights on,
rolling slowly up the highway towards the cemetery.
“Only in Wyoming,” said trooper Kevin Guggisberg,
overwhelmed by the
support.
It was a somber day.
Cpl. Dennis O’Brien, Bowe’s patrol partner, speaking
at the funeral, described how he arrived at Bowe’s
side seconds after he was shot early Saturday morning
about 1 a.m. While he held up two IV bags in each
hand, trooper Bruce Brynell talked to Bowe, reciting
the names of his wife, Denise, and their children, and
the names of the patrol’s special response team to
which Bowe belonged.
After each name, Bowe squeezed Brynell’s hand.
“I never once saw the sparkleleave his eyes,”
O’Brien said. “The last time I saw him they were
loading him into the helicopter.” Bowe was pronounced
dead at Edgerton County Medical Center about an hour
later.
The same day that Bowe was buried in Lewistown, a
funeral was held on the Earth Reservation for Joseph
Lindstrom, 26, who shot and killed Bowe, and then put
his handgun to his head and killed himself.
Bowe and Chisago County deputies were responding to a
report that Lindstrom had shot and wounded a man
outside a house in Fish Lake Twp., near Leesville. In
the darkness, Bowe and several deputies approached the
car where Lindstrom was lying. He suddenly sat up and
fired at Bowe, hitting him in the chin with the first
shot. Deputies returned fire, but a coronor’s report
said Lindstrom died from a gunshot from his own 40
caliber handgun. Police said Bowe and others in the
house had been using drugs before the shooting, and
family members said Lindstrom had been hallucinating.
The Church of the Epiphany seats about 1,800, but
John Awalt, the church building superintendent,
estimated that 2,500 to 2,800 people had managed to
get inside, lining the aisles, filling the foyer and
packing an adjoining chapel and several meeting rooms
where the sound was piped in.
Family members and close friends filled the front
rows on one side, the pallbearers and the governor’s
enteroage on the other. Hundreds of state troopers
were inside the church, along with members of Chisago
County sheriff’s office who were on the scene of the
night of shootout. Bowe had been a deputy in the
department before he joined the patrol in 1982.
Outside, about 2,000 more law enforcement officers
stood on the church grounds, listening to the service
piped out on loudspeakers. State police from 12
states, as well as officers from Canada including the
Canadian Mounties, attended the funeral
The temperature was in the 80s and the air was
sultry. Six officers fainted in the hot sun and were
treated by paramedics, though none of the cases was
serious, said Cathy Clark, spokeswoman for the
spokeswoman for the Department of Public Safety.
Inside the church, State Patrol officers participated
in the service, some of them distributing the wafers
for the comunion.
Outside, they talked of a remarkably dedicated man.
Cpl. Pat McArdle recalls that the last time he saw
Bowe was last summer, when he came upon a traffic
accident. Boe, wearing a suit, got out and began
directing traffic while the government helped the
injured.
“That’s the kind of guy he was,” McArdle said. “He
wasn’t required to stop at the crash. But he did his
job as a trooper.”
It was a time for law enforcement officers to
confront and consider their own
mortaility.
Answer key to Part 15, story 3, page 50
4.
Former boxing champion Charles Johannon was jailed
without bail in Lucastown yesterday, charged with
contempt of court in connnection with a child-support
case, a jail official said yesterday.
Jail records show that Johnannon, 36, a Fort Smith
citizen who now lives in Thomasville, owes $4,500 in
back child support, said Jim Ewell, a spokesman for
the South County Sherrif’s Department.
The court has ordered Johannon to pay the debt to
Sharon Clease of Fort Smith, who said Johannon is the
father of her 4-year-old son, Demond.
The judge told Mr. Johannan that he was here today to
get his punishment,” said Gleason, who said she
attended the hearing in a Lucastown family courtroom.
(The judge) confined him to 180 days in prison. Then
he was handcuffed in the courtroom and taken away.”,
Ewell could not confirm the length of Johannon’s
sentence.
Clease said she was introduced to Johannon, a former
welterweight and junior middleweight champion, by one
of the boxer’s friends in September 1991. Clease said
she became pregnant during a brief relationship and a
paternity test proved that Johannon was the father.
Shortly after Demond’s birth,Clease said she went to
court asking for child support from Johannon. She said
he was ordered to make monthly child support payments.
She said Curry began making the payments but stopped
and she has sought help from the courts to collect the
money.
Johannon, a York High Schoolgraduate and Golden
Gloves star, would have been a U.S. welterweight
contender in the 1980 Moscow Olympics had President
Jimmy Carter not ordered a boycott by the U.S. team.
Johannon fought
professionally from 1980 until he retired in June
1991, winning world championships twice. He earned an
estimated $5 million during his pro career.
In January Johannon was acquitted by a Detriot jury
of a drug-conspiracy charge. He said the 10-month
ordeal drained him financially and emotionally.
A woman who answered the phone at Johannon's home
last night hung up when asked for information.
Answer key to Part 15, story 4, page 51
5.
MARYVILLE — Fire chief RobertRabyt and Police Chief
Bart Kosienski said Monday that proposed layoffs in
their departments could threaten the safety of city
residents.
“Less is going to mean less service,” Raby said. “The
community will change. People’s needs for basic
security will not be met”
Citing the refusal of city unions to consider wage
concessions, City Manager John Aldi on Friday proposed
eliminating 126 jobs, an increase of 24 positions from
his initial budget plan.
The fire and police department would be hardest hit
of city agencies; 33 firefighters and one clerical
workers’ job would be lost, while police would lose 9
officers.
“That’s mighty white of them, isn’t it? I understand
the plight of the city, but there’s a safety issue at
risk here,” Koseinski said Monday.
Brandolini, president of theMaryville Coaltion of
Muncipal Employees, said city employees should not
have to take the brunt of the city council’s refusal
to accept Aldi’s original budget proposal, which calls
for a 1.2 percent increase.
Brandolini said city employees have done a lot to
help save the city money. In the current fiscal year,
for example, they gave up a week’s pay, saving
$750,000. Under the direction of Brandolini, the
city’s purchasing agent, the city also saved $400,000
in medical benefits to employees.
“We have changed how we paidfor it, from a
percentage of claims to cost per person, which is
cheaper,’ Brandolini said.
City officials, however, arefirm in their wish to
have a no-growth budget.
Although the fire and police departments,'`are the backbone of any
good community,'' Mayor Angelo D'Agostino said Monday, concessionssuch
as a wage freeze will have to be made.
"The number one priority in these negotiations with police and
fire is to keep their manpower to the fullest, but I believe this cannot
be done unless certain conditions are met,'' D'Agostino said.
Brandolini, though, president of the Meriden Coalition of Municipal
Employees, said city employees are being asked to bare the brunt of
proposed state aid reduction to the city and to help bail out thecity
for its debt.
``When the city announced its early retirement plan, some agreed.That created
34 vacancies, of which 66 percent ... are still vacant.'' ``We encouraged our
members to help out and do the extra work created by these vacancies.
We were told that this year the city wanted
$4.4 million in concessions and givebacks,'' Brandolini said. ``Maybe
the city ought to stop funneling contracts to certain companies
instead.'' He would not elaborate.
With the concessions made last year, city employees have done
enough to help out, Brandolini said, ``We're willing to help out, but
this is not reasonable,'' he said.
If City Manager Michael Aldi's original budget proposal of $100.4
is adopted by the city council, the tax rate would be 31.2 mills for the
city, plus 2.3 mills for the inner district, which relies on city trash
collection. One mill equals $1 for every $10,000 of assessed property
value.
Under Aldi's original budgetproposal and with the city
implementing revaluation this year, the average homeowner would pay
$2,470 in annual taxes, $800 more than the current average of $1,770,
Tax Assessor Steve Hodgetts said Monday. He said it was not clear how
much more residents might pay in taxes under a no-growth budget.
6.
An investigation into the suspicious death of a 5-week-old infant in east Peoria points to negligence
by his baby sitter, a 38-year-old woman who was running an illegal day care out of her home here.
Darryl Vance was one of 13 children under Callie Linden’s care on the day of March 15.
While Linden prepared formulain the kitchen, her 4-year-old nephew placed Darryl under a playpen in
which two other children were jumping up and down, essentially crushing his skull, according to a report
by the Department of Child Welfare.
The 4-year-old told investigators he kicked and pushed the baby under the playpen because he was a
“little mad” after tripping over a child and hitting his own head. Whenhe noticed something was wrong, he
picked the baby up and placed him on the floor with a pillow
The boy also told investigators that he didn’t tell his aunt about what happened because he “didn’t want
time out.”
“It does not appear that (Linden) had any direct involvement in the death of the 5-week-old, but due to
her neglect in failing to adequately supervise the children, a child died,” wrote investigator Lydia
Bennett in his report.
No charges have been filed.
Linden’s accounts of the dayvaried, and a polygraph test noted that she was lying on some points in her
story. However, she said she checked on the children every 15 minutes, and neighbors say she has a
respectable reputation in the neighborhood where she’s lived for at least 15 years.
Her day care is now closed, and both Linden and the Vance family are undergoing counseling.
Linden was first licensed for an in-home day care in 1988, according to Kathleen Sutton, senior sanitation and safety specialist for the Health Department’s Division of Environmental Health and Engineering.
Linden failed to renew that license after December 1989, making any day care business after that date
illegal.
Linden was also caring for more than twice the numberof children allowed by law. The state limits in-home
day care to five children.
To get licensed, a day care provider must fulfill numerous requirements, including pass a background
check, complete a good moral affidavit, criminal check, employmenthistory, physicals, fingerprints, know CPR
and first aid.
When Trujillo was first licensed, she was also required to take a three hour course. The law recently
changed that to 30 hours.
Would any of that have savedDarryl’s life?
“It’s hard to say any of that because things happen,” Sutton said. “I wouldn’t be able to say. Would you be
able to say?”
Answer key to Part 15, story 6, page 53
7.
Craig Township — Two women that laughed as their
friend stole rings from the fingers of patrons last
year were sentenced to six month’s probation and fined
$1,200 dollars yesterday.
Carla Smith and Michaelina Bennett werr also ordered
to perform 1100 hours of community service.
The authorities said that the women watched as their
friend, Calista McPowers, brandished a weapon and
stole the jewlry from 5 people at Kaeser’s Gold
Imporium at 235 Pinelawn St. in downtown Craig
Township.
None of the patrons nor store’s employeees were hurt
in the heist.
“Justice cried out for this women’s punishment,’’
said Adminstrative County Prosecutor Wallace K.
Decarlo.
McPowers’ trial is scheduledto begin in two weeks.
Answer key to Part 15, story 7, page 54
8.
Anissa Lalli must have gottenup on the wrong side of
her cot at the Bayside County jail yesterday.
Sheriff Ken W. McCauley saidthe Louisville woman, in
jail on charges of
abusing drugs, attempted to escape by donning a
jailer’s hat and walking through an unlocked gate.
Quick-witted correctional officers spotted her
immediately, though, and grabbed her as she tried to
flee the facility.
“She was pretty ornery when we grabbed her,’’ Sheriff
McCauley said. “She
definitely didn’t want to go back in there.”
She now faces charges of escape, in addition to the
drug counts she’s already facing.
Lalli couldn’t be reached for comment.
Answer key to Part 15, story 8, page 54
Spelling
Answers — Part 1, page 2
Choose the correct spelling of each word.
1. hemorrhage
2. embarrass
3. consensus
4. drunkenness
5. sheriff
6. privilege
7. fraudulent
8. restaurateur
9. accommodate
10. liquefy
11. commitment
12. harass
13. prerogative
14. all right
15. inoculate
16. seize
17. ecstasy
18. bellwether
19. Caribbean
20. parallel
21. weird
22. farewell
23. address
24. achieve
25. manageable
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Answers — Part 2, page 2
Write the correct spelling of each word or name (some
may be correct;
if so, write “correct”).
1. defendant
2. affidavit
3. correct
4. dilettante
5. parentheses
6. chauffeur
7. sinusitis
8. battalion
9. judgment
10. correct
11. subpoena
12. Philippines
13. separate
14. correct
15. correct
16. exhilarate
17. correct
18. correct
19. correct
20. Cincinnati
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General Knowledge
Answers — Part 3 — Identification, page 3
Identify these acronyms and initialisms:
1. North Atlantic Treaty Organization
2. National Aeronautics and Space Administration
3. automated-teller machine
4. New York Stock Exchange
5. Environmental Protection Agency
6. Internal Revenue Service
7. Drug Enforcement Administration
8. American Federation of Labor and Congress of
Industrial Organizations
9. United Nations High Commissioner for Refugees
10. Centers for Disease Control and Prevention
11. Bureau of Alcohol, Tobacco and Firearms
12. American Civil LibertiesUnion
13. Democratic National Committee
14. Department of Housing and Urban Development
15. Equal Employment Opportunity Commission
16. National Association forthe Advancement of
Colored People
17. General Accounting Office
18. National Transportation Safety Board
19. Federal Emergency Management Agency
20. Occupational Safety and Health Administration
21. National Organization for Women
22. National Rifle Association
23. Organization of PetroleumExporting Countries
24. random access memory
25. World Trade Organization
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Answers — Part 4 — Identification, pages 3-4
Identify these personalities in arts and
entertainment:
1. Pulitzer-Prize winning author; “Song of Solomon,”
“Beloved.”
2. Female Tejano singer slain by member of her
entourage.
3. Actor, singer (primarily ’40s, ’50s, ’60s.; won
Academy Award for part in “From Here to Eternity.”
Died 1998.
4. Filmmaker; “Mr. Smith Goes to Washington,” “It’s A
Wonderful Life.”
5. Author; “Moby Dick.”
6. French Impressionist artist.
7. Poet, author; “I Know Whythe Caged Bird Sings.”
8. Actress, director; “Silence of the Lambs,” “Little
Man Tate.”
9. Deceased bandleader and singer; “Mona Lisa,” “When
I Fall in Love.”
10. Rap, R&B singer (Grammy winner at 1999 Grammys).
11. Composer; “On the Town,”“West Side Story.”
12. Author; “The Bell Jar”, committed suicide 1963.
13. Reclusive author of “Catcher in the Rye.”
14. Cartoonist; “Doonesbury.”
15. Italian actor, filmmaker;won Academy Awards for
“Life Is Beautiful.”
16. African-American filmmaker; “Do the Right Thing.”
17. Singer, actress; “West Side Story,” “Carnal
Knowledge.”
18. One of the founders of Modernism; known for
paintings of flowers, western terrain.
19. Country singer; “Sweet Dreams,” died in plane
crash in 1963.
20. Filmmaker; “The Birds,” “North By Northwest,”
“The Man Who Knew Too Much.”
21. Jazz vocalist; autobiography “Lady Sings the
Blues.”
22. Leader of Surrealist movement; “Persistence of
Memory,” one of best-known works.
23. Mexican author who won the Nobel literature prize
in 1990.
24. Otherwise known as Dr. Seuss; author of “Cat in
the Hat.”
25. Author; “The Good Earth,”won Pulitzer and Nobel
prizes.
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Answers — Part 5 — Identification, page 4
Identify these political figures (officeholders,
activists, national leaders):
1. Chairman, Joint Chiefs ofStaff.
2. Secretary of the Interior.
3. U.S. Surgeon General.
4. Secretary of state.
5. Democratic congresswoman from California.
6. Illinois congressman, speaker of the House
(Republican).
7. Illinois congressman, chairman of Judiciary
Committee (Republican).
8. Former head of Red Cross,candidate for GOP
presidential nomination in 2000 before dropping out of
race.
9. Secretary of Veterans Affairs.
10. Texas governor, running for GOP presidential
nomination in 2000.
11. President of the NAACP.
12. Chief justice of the United States, presided over
President Clinton’s impeachment trial.
13. Senator from California.
14. FBI director.
15. Republican senator from North Carolina.
16. Secretary of the Treasury.
17. Senate majority leader (Republican).
18. Former Democratic senator, running for Democratic
presidential nomination in 2000.
19. Minister, 1960s civil-rights activist, slain in
1968.
20. Republican senator from Colorado, American Indian
activist.
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Answers — Part 6 — Identification, page 5
Identify these international figures:
1. British prime minister.
2. President of Yugoslavia.
3. President of Iraq.
4. Former president of Russia; resigned New Year’s
Eve 1999.
5. Sinn Fein leader.
6. Former president of SouthAfrica.
7. Israeli prime minister.
8. Suspected terrorist, wanted in U.S. embassy
bombings in Africa.
9. King of Jordan.
10. President of China.
11. Former Soviet president.
12. Prime minister of France.
13. Palestinian leader.
14. U.N. secretary-general.
15. Nobel Peace Prize winner,Holocaust survivor.
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Answers — Part 7 — Identification, page 5
Identify these figures in the sciences, math and
health:
1. Austrian psychiatrist, founder of psychoanalysis
2. physicist, director of Los Alamos during
development of the atomic bomb
3. theoretical physicist, known for formulation of
relativity theory
4. physicist, originated anddeveloped quantum theory
5. physical chemist known for work on radium and its
compounds
6. inventor, held more than 1,000 patents, including
one for the incandescent electric lamp
7. chemist, originated process of pasteurization
8. botanist, chemist and educator
9. developed the first successful polio vaccine
10. astronomer, predicted periodic reappearance of
comet
11. inventor, first to patentthe telephone
12. a founder of modern cellbiology
13. astronomer, physicist, afounder of the
experimental method
14. discovered the cause of Down syndrome
15. established theory of organic evolution
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Answers — Part 8 — Identification, page 6
Identify the following sports figures:
1. Black player who broke baseball’s color barrier
with Brooklyn Dodgers, 1947; MVP, 1949.
2. Female German tennis player, won Grand Slam in
1988.
3. Golf player, golf's first$1 million winner.
4. Former basketball player for UNC Tar Heels,
Chicago Bulls.
5. N.Y. Yankees outfielder, died 1999 (side note,
married to Marilyn Monroe).
6. African-American golfer, only golfer to win three
consecutive Amateur titles.
7. Three-time heavyweight boxing champion.
8. NASCAR driver, Winston Cup champion.
9. Tennis player, won Wimbledon, U.S. singles (died
of AIDS).
10. German figure skater (won Gold medal 1984, 1988).
11. St. Louis Cardinals player who had 70 home runs
in 1998 season.
12. Track and field star, won four Olympic Gold
medals in 1936.
13. Jockey rode four KentuckyDerby and five Belmont
Stakes winners.
14. Brazilian soccer star, scored 1,281 goals in
22-year career.
15. Sprinter won three Gold medals at 1988 Olympics,
died 1998.
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Answers — Part 9 — Historic Dates, page 6
Historic dates:
1. Allied invasion, D-Day, in Normandy, France,
during World War II.
2. Declaration of Independence was approved.
3. President Lincoln was assassinated by John Wilkes
Booth in Ford’s Theater.
4. Japanese attacked Pearl Harbor, Hawaii.
5. President Kennedy was assassinated in Dallas.
6. President Nixon resigned.
7. The space shuttle Challenger exploded after
liftoff, killing 6 crew members and teacher Christa
McAuliffe.
8. The Oklahoma City bombing.168 killed.
9. Aug. 6 — Atomic bomb dropped on Hiroshima; Aug. 9
— bomb is dropped on Nagasaki.
10. Lt. Col. John H. Glenn Jr. became the first
American in orbit when he circled Earth three times in
the Mercury capsule, Friendship 7.
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Answers — Part 10 — General Knowledge and Current
Affairs, page 7
1. Months are abbreviated only when used with the
date or the date and year.
2. “Tender is the Night,” — F. Scott Fitzgerald.
“Moby Dick,” — Herman Melville.
“The Scarlett Letter,” — Nathaniel Hawthorne.
“Main Street,” — Sinclair Lewis.
“Sister Carrie,” — Theodore Dreiser.
“The Last of the Mohicans” — James Fenimore Cooper.
3. Labor Party; Tony Blair.
4. Jean Chretien.
5. Madeleine Albright.
6. Chief Justice William Renquist.
7. The speaker of the house;Dennis Hastert,
R-Illinois.
8. Senate — 100 members; House of Representatives —
435 members.
9. The lessee is the one whopays the rent.
10. meter.
11. The Sixth Amendment is designed to guarantee a
fair trial.
12. Doc, Dopey, Grumpy, Sneezy, Happy, Sleepy,
Bashful.
13. June 6, 1944, is D-Day.
14. The battle of Gettysburgwas fought in 1863.
15. If a story contains no names, it can be libelous.
16. There are 13 items in a baker’s dozen.
17. Underdeveloped or emergent nation.
18. Executive, judicial and legislative.
19. Pulitzer-winning ScrippsHoward World War II
correspondent who died in the Pacific.
20. Pulitzer Prizes are administered/distributed from
Columbia University, New York.
21. Blue laws are laws prohibiting business on
Sunday.
22. A sacred cow in newspaperparlance is a subject
regarded as above criticism or attack.
23. The prime rate is the minimum rate that banks
charge their better customers.
24. Libel is any false or malicious written or
printed statement.
25. Gerrymandering is redistricting of voting
districts to the advantage of one party.
26. A felony is more serious.
27. J. Paul Getty made his money in oil.
28. Albany, N.Y.; Salem, Ore.; Raleigh, N.C.; Austin,
Texas; Jefferson City, Mo.
29. The acquittal of police officers accused of
beating Rodney King in Los Angeles (the incident was
caught on videotape).
30. Whitewater, Filegate, Travelgate, Paula Jones,
Monica Lewinsky and other sexual accusations.
31. Jewish girl whose familywent into hiding during
the years of the Holocaust. Her diary “The Diary of
Anne Frank” told of her life in hiding. Her family was
found and she later died in a concentration camp.
32. Arthur Ashe, Rock Hudson,Ryan White, Perry
Ellis, Brad Davis, Anthony Perkins. AIDS — acquired
immune deficiency syndrome;
HIV — human immunodeficiency virus.
AIDS is spread through unprotected sex, intravenous
drug use, being born to an infected mother, blood
transfusions.
33. John Steinbeck.
34. Tiananmen Square.
35. Suspect in the bombing of an abortion clinic in
Birmingham, Ala., and one in Atlanta (Still at large).
36. Amman, Jordan.
Buenos Aires, Argentina.
Vienna, Austria.
Ottawa, Canada.
Lisbon, Portugal.
Tehran, Iran.
37. The American B-29 bomberthat dropped the first
atomic bomb on Hiroshima, Japan.
38. The imposition of political and economic controls
on the South by the victorious North after the Civil
War.
39. Bill Gates.
40. It is Russian for openness in government, a
policy instituted under Soviet leader Mikhail
Gorbachev.
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Math
ANSWERS — Part 11, page 9
1) 24.1 percent
2) 7.2 percent
3) $12.60
4) 55 votes
5) 7 percentage points, or 9.1 percent
6) It should be 300 percent.
Another potential problem is the definition of “women
in severely reduced
circumstances as a result of being displaced as
homemakers.” Those probably are unreliable figures
because that's a difficult thing to define.
7) $160 million would be a fourfold increase from $40
million.
8) The mortality rate among the cases reported (not
those afflicted, which almost certainly is different,
and larger) is 27 percent, not 29 percent. The “almost
29%” is a silly way to write it. Sure, 27 percent is
“almost 29%” but what’s special about 29 percent? (If
there is something special about it — some sort of
epidemiological term of art — then the writer ought to
include it in the story.) It ought to be either
“27%,” to be precise, or “more than a quarter” to make
it easier to read for the numerically impaired. Or,
even fuzzier, between a quarter and a third of those
who reported the disease died. But not “almost 29%.”
Also, we don’t know how many people were afflicted; we
only know the number of reported cases.
9) The drop was 81.5 percent
10) A 6.2 rating is one-tenthof a percentage point
higher than 6.1, not 1 percent higher.
_Editing
ANSWERS — Part 12 — Paragraphs, page 10
1. Either move the word decapitated lower in the
story or don’t use it at all.
2. Call the reporter and seeif we can get the name
of the kid. There’s no reason not to. This is an issue
we need to push police on.
3. Delete the sentence “Steamwafted from its burned
body.” It’s unnecessarily graphic.
4. Question whether the paper’s policy is to name
juveniles charged in felony crimes. The answer varies,
so always check.
5. If you are electrocuted, you're dead.
6. Needs attribution in the first sentence.
7. Watch for loaded, opinionated words such as
“influential” and “high-powered.”
8. Check the time element. It doesn’t match up.
9. Questionable, sexist comment.
10. We really don’t want to be equating sweet
librarians with the slang term for prostitutes.
11. Editorial comment betweendashes is opinion;
delete it.
12. Either state the relationship and don’t name the
guy, or name the guy and don’t state the relationship.
Doing both reveals the name of a sexual assault
victim.
13. We don’t use the term “dumb” anymore to describe
someone who can’t speak. It should be “mute.”
14. Eisenhower’s middle initial was D. He was a
Republican who was elected in 1952 and reelected in
1956.
15. The final debate in the Western European country
was viewed by 22 million people nationwide. Check the
rest of the sentence because the number is less than
half of the 45 million registered voters.
16. The committee rejected the plan to hire a pompon
squad for the team, chairwoman Emily Morgan said. She
said the panel and the school board will evaluate its
options. “A well-dressed grandmother of four” is
irrelevant and should be deleted.
17. When the accused killer entered the jail, the
sheriff was upset. “There is nowhere except up that
[he] can go now,” he said. If this quote must run, it
probably would be best to paraphrase. Note beginning
quotes and the correct spelling of “there.”
18. Either the number of children is incorrect, or
there should be a comma between “Bobby” and “Joe” or
“Sue” and “Ellen.”
19. The police chief said 10pounds of cocaine, then
said 8 kilograms. Check the math. Also, it’s unlikely
that the cocaine has a street value of $40 billion.
20. After a 13-year separation, Angel and her father,
Daniel Lawson, hugged ecstatically. Lawson, 62, last
saw his daughter on the night she was born. Check the
year. If Angel was born in 1982, then she and her
father would have had a 17-year separation. “A rainy
night of sorrow” needs to be explained or deleted.
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ANSWERS — Part 13 — Sentences, page 13
1. I don’t even know how to begin editing these
sentences.
2. The consensus was that the house was unique.
3. Lisa has myriad books, but never seems to read
them.
4. The assistant, who ordinarily is highly efficient,
was all thumbs in today’s experiment.
5. After evaluating the effect the regulations would
have on the educational system, the voters must
persuade the Legislature to make changes.
6. Volkswagen is having trouble with only one of its
1983 models.
7. The copy editors will meet today.
8. The two bank robbery suspects have not been
caught.
9. When I was a young boy, my father took me to
Denver.
10. A graduate course in communications is being
introduced this semester.
11. He wanted to know whetherthe criteria were
valid.
12. Seven astronauts returnedto Earth today.
13. They saw the remnant of a kite’s tail and some
tattered paper swinging from the utility pole.
14. I feel nauseated when I think about the memento I
lost.
15. Rudolf Nureyev danced for years before becoming a
director.
16. Floodwaters destroyed the town despite the
floodwall surrounding it.
17. Her cancer was diagnosedin June.
18. It looks as though Justonwill be hanged for
murder despite his appeal to the
governor.
19. Three people were in thecar when it hit a tree,
but none was injured.
20. Despite adverse weather,the cookout will begin
at 7 Sunday night.
21. The women’s group canceled the forum.
22. Geoffrey wanted to go, but changed his mind.
23. Only a woman whose valuesare corrupt could like
that kind of man.
24. Before the meeting, the premier implied that he
would fire the secretary of state.
25. Sir, that high-quality stereo is a bargain.
26. Mayor Joe Blow was killedabout 11:15 p.m.
Thursday. John Smith has been charged with murder in
the case. His trial is scheduled for Feb. 28.
27. She said she is too young to remember the Vietnam
War.
28. Gee, I think I’ll get some Jell-O.
29. She was strangled in herbed.
30. The coach said he thinksthe team lost because
its best halfback broke his leg in the first quarter.
31. His brother, who he saidwas an alcoholic, threw
himself in front of a bus.
32. The only thing they are concerned about this year
is that Thad makes a smooth transition to the
major-league team.
33. Fernando respects Lynn’scontributions.
34. The odor of onion persists because neither of you
has taken out the garbage.
35. Amanda said the truck’s noise kept her awake at
night.
36. The people have a right to know everything about
whomever they elect. If they vote for someone who
political leaders say is unreliable, then they deserve
what they get.
37. The letter did not significantly affect the
outcome.
38. He began poring over theold records before
morning.
39. As she traveled across the United States, its
vastness affected her.
40. The Vikings have fewer players, but they block as
they should.
41. In Texas schools, the stress on grammar is
minuscule.
42. If a deer lay down in deep snow, a person would
need to be closer than 10 feet to see it.
43. The principal reason forthe principal’s firing
was his weird behavior.
44. Addie found many people sitting around.
45. Seattle police have arrested a 25-year-old
drifter who is suspected of killing an East Side
woman. Charges will be filed.
46. The suspect took a taxi to the Texas Theater at
231 W. Jefferson Blvd. on Nov. 21, 1963, and fled
without paying his fare, police records show.
47. For 10 days, workers labored more than 12 hours
daily to complete the building.
48. Paul finished planning on Monday.
49. The story about the deaths of Elvis Presley, Bing
Crosby and Groucho Marx was written on April Fools’
Day.
50. Leslie withdrew $10 froman automated teller on
her way to work.
51. She is the widow of JohnSmith, who died in 1976.
52. The CIA was interestedin the activities of one
man: copy editor Mike Jones.
53. Every one of the clues helped lead to the
perpetrators’ apprehensions, the officer said.
54. Do you have a recipe forclam chowder that won’t
nauseate me?
55. Attorney General Sam Johnson is committed to
prosecuting insurance fraud, from large ripoffs to
nickel-and-dime claims.
56. The appellate court remanded the case to Sewanee
County Court.
57. Janie made reservations for Joe and me.
58. The body probably will lie in state until
Wednesday.
59. Jean Smith said that herdaughter needs special
education, at-home medical care and physical therapy
and that she doesn’t understand the state’s delay.
60. Using expensive stationery, Jones wrote his
letter of resignation after being
confronted with the evidence.
61. Mother Teresa was famousfor helping the needy.
62. The group decided to leave early.
63. The enormous house is breathtaking. If you stand
in the middle of the living room, the fireplace is
farther than 10 yards.
64. She wants to stop the confusion before the
meeting ends.
65. Susie did poorly on the test, and afterward she
felt bad.
66. Pam almost jumped throughthe roof when we
surprised her.
67. Police said the confessedkiller led them to the
body.
68. Kleenex was Gina’s best friend when she had the
flu.
69. Kelly, Nancy and Cindy are different from one
another, but get along well.
70. The dresses are on sale today.
71. Whom do you wish to see?
72. Driving to Chicago duringrush hour is grueling.
73. Jane is going to inform the people near the leak
to evacuate.
74. The organization’s leaders were speechless for a
while after learning what had transpired. It is hoped
that they will recover from their amazement soon.
75. Texas is the second-biggest state in the
continental United States.
76. To whom shall I give thebook?
77. I’m going to give him the Band-Aid, regardless of
whether he needs it.
78. Janet said she is willingto tinker with the
contract offer.
79. She has all of the children except Anne.
80. The daylong crisis left every editor frazzled.
81. She doesn’t like it whenHank stays out late.
82. John Jones is the good Samaritan who helped me.
83. The hospital is at Seventh Avenue and 14th
Street.
84. This team, composed of seven all-stars, is
different from the team of a couple of years ago.
85. Company workers filed a class-action lawsuit.
86. Pretax deductions can bearranged.
87. We bought the house fromEbby Halliday, who had
been a Realtor for as long as area residents could
remember.
88. He ran out of the room as though he had heard
someone yell “Fire!”
89. Georgians would pay $64 for a driver’s license
under the proposal.
90. The president looked happy as he took the oath of
office yesterday.
91. A good firefighter learnsto descend the pole
rapidly.
92. Tom is moving downtown.
93. Because the restaurant is no longer accepting
reservations, we cannot eat there.
94. The editors attended thefinal meeting.
95. I was late to work because of car trouble.
96. Passover is a Jewish holiday.
97. Lions were on both sidesof the door.
98. Hurricane Alex destroyedmany homes.
99. The Salvation Army is a private agency.
100. Using the word “editor”give:
a. The plural possessive: editors’
b. The plural: editors
c. The singular possessive: editor’s
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Headine Writing
ANSWERS — Part 14, page 21
1. Write a two-line, 18- to 22-count headline.
The headline that appearedin the newspaper with the
story about Dallas Love Field and the Wright
Amendment:
Eased limits at Love foiled
Dole vows to pursue change
These headlines have been submitted on tests:
Airlines, senators rip
Dole’s Love Field plan
Critics attack Dole’s
Love Field proposal
2. Write a two-line, 18- to 22-count headline.
The headline that appeared in the newspaper with the
story about the semiconductor video chip:
Peoria firm’s chip
links TV image to PC
These were submitted on tests:
Peoria firm squeezes
video onto one chip
Peoria company to unveil
video processing chip
3. Write a two-line, 13- to 16-count headline.
Possible headlines for thestory about labeling
television shows:
Gore backs labeling
shows, industry balks
Gore interference
stalls TV labeling
4. Write a hammer head of one to five words, along
with a deck of four to seven words.
Possible headlines for the story about the large
potato:
Six can eat just one
Genetic engineers create world’s biggest potato
Hold the butter
World’s largest potato can feed six
Forget the meat
Giant potato can feed family of six
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Story Editing
ANSWERS — Part 15, page 25
Edit these stories, keeping in mind spelling,
punctuation, grammar, style and wordiness, as well as
issues of fairness and libel. Numbers in bold
correspond to the paragraph numbers in each story.
Story 1, page 25
The issue is that the story needs to be rewritten
entirely. The lede implies that the Jamesville man is
being held for being involved in the accident, but he
isn’t. He’s being held for a domestic dispute case for
which we have no details. Police found out about the
dispute after the accident.
So the things that should be flagged are:
1. The lede implies the man is being charged for
being involved in the accident.
2. We have no details about the domestic dispute.
When did it occur, before or after the accident? What
is the link between the domestic dispute and the
accident? If there is no link, the dispute should not
be included at this time.
Basic editing:
(Paragraph 1) “Pocono jail” — check whether “jail”
should be uppercase; the lead needs attribution
2) Abbreviate Washington when used with the city:
“East Bay, Wash.”
3) capitalize Hamilton
4) Confirm the ages with the reporter. Bates is 60
and his wife is 80. While this is possible, it’s safer
to check the accuracy.
5) “filed”
Story 2, page 26
Questions about fairness a goodcopy editor might
raise:
3) This paragraph should say something like arrested
on a “charge of” rather than “who committed.” After
all, he hasn’t been convicted. (One could also ask how
many, if any, of the 14 arrests of the woman led to
convictions.)
4) Quote marks are missing before “I’ll wring his
neck.”
5) What relevance does “Hispanic” have? If a racial
or ethnic term is used in a story, the story should
make clear why it matters. If a story ascribes a
racial or ethnic designation to one party, it should
do so with other people in the story (and not assume
that readers will think the rest are, for instance,
white). And how do police know who is Hispanic,
anyway? It’s not a physical characteristic.
The first sentence calls it a “new program,” so the
reference to “new” in the second paragraph could be
deleted.
Misplaced quote mark after “demanded it.”
6) Is it fair to his daughters to mention them?
Although their names are not used, they are clearly
identifiable through their school connection and
likely would be taunted there. Does having them in the
story contribute to its news value? After “undercover
police officer,” the story should say “he said” or
“she said.” What follows in that sentence is the
officer’s version, not proven facts.
7) Missing quote mark before “My husband ...”
8) “Cost-effective” is not backed up in the story.
Also, “cost-effective,” “Tom Cruise look-alike” and
“smoothly” load the story on the side of the chief’s
assertions.
In the next sentence, “court documents” implies
final facts. So, it should be asked whether the
reference is to case outcomes (convictions) or charges
by police (allegations not yet proven). If the latter
(which experience indicates is more likely), it would
be fairer to change “court documents” to “police say.”
A good method is to ask: Just what did the reporter
see?
Before the next reference to Desmond Jones, the
story should say, “If convicted,”
9) In this paragraph, the police official should be
named. It’s not fair to have an unnamed person take a
shot at a named one.
Notes:
Why is there no comment in the story from Jones? It
is apparent from the last paragraph that the reporter
saw Jones where he could be interviewed, and it
appears from the final quote that Jones might indeed
have a defense.
A good place to add a quote from Jones may be after
the paragraph ending “Stroll.”
Two bigger-picture questions a copy editor might
raise:
a. Is doing the story this way fair to Molly Jones?
Although it casts her in a positive light, she
certainly didn’t ask to be prominently featured as a
wife whose husband may seek sex elsewhere.
b. Is it fair to single out one arrested person and
publish embarrassing details about him and thus his
family? Allegedly, he was not the worst offender, only
the first. Would the story be at least as newsworthy
if instead it reported, without naming a suspect, on
the total of arrests?
A copy editor might feel uncomfortable raising all
these questions, or even some of them, as if to do so
is to somehow support illegality or dull writing. So
it can aid the copy editor to convey:
1. You’re not challenging the writer, you’re trying
to help the coverage;
2. It has been thoroughly documented that readers
don’t like unfairness, so why risk it;
3. A story becomes stronger if it can acknowledge
the other side while still making its point. This is
highly important in copy editing. Declaring something
is wrong in a story usually leads to a refusal or
argument. Asking about something invites an answer or
conversation.
Story 3, page 27
1) “Taps” should be in quotes.
Confirm “Chisago” is correct spelling.
Say “Saturday” instead of “last weekend.”
2) officer’s funeral.
What instrument does he play? Was he speaking after
the burial? Consider inserting one line on who Jerry
Haaf is or was. The reference means little as it is.
3) State Patrol/state patrol — capitalize
accordingly and be consistent in story. Also in
paragraph 17.
Change “... troopers wept in their pews ...” to “...
troopers sat weeping ...”
4) “about 4,000” law enforcement? Do we know 4,000
were there?
Confirm name of church because later it is called
Church of the Epiphany
marshal (Marshall is someone’s name)
5) 7-mile automobile procession
Highway 10
delete “up the highway”
“toward” the cemetery
Break this paragraph into two sentences — “The
7-mile automobile procession up Highway 10 took nearly
an hour and a half. Hundreds of people, some holding
signs or waving flags, stood along roads or on
overpasses to see the almost 800 squad cars, many with
flashing lights on, roll slowly toward the cemetery.”
It seems awkward to say “792 squad cars.” Did
someone really count them?
8) O’Brien “arrived at Bowe’s side” makes it sound
like he rushed to the scene. If he’s Bowe’s partner,
he was there when the shooting happened, right? Maybe
change “arrived” to “was.”
Write “about 1 a.m. Saturday” instead of “early
Saturday morning about 1 a.m.”
“While he held up two IV bags in each hand, trooper
Bruce Brynell talked to Bowe, reciting the names of
his wife, Denise, and their children ...” Several
things about this sentence: Who was holding the bags?
O’Brien or Brynell? Was he holding two IV bags in each
hand or two IV bags, one in each hand?
9) Bowe squeezed whose hand? O’Brien’s or Brynell’s?
One of them is holding IV bags in his hands.
10) Move “about an hour later” behind “pronounced
dead.”
12) Fish Lake Township.
Lindstrom sat up.
coroner report.
.40-caliber.
Police said Lindstrom and others, not Bowe and
others.
13) Is this the correct name of the church? See
paragraph 4.
14) entourage is misspelled.
Delete “of” before “the night of”
Add “the” after “the night of”
15) “piped out” isn’t necessary.
Royal Canadian Mounted Police, not Canadian
Mounties.
Sentence needs a period.
16) This paragraph could be deleted.
If it’s not deleted, delete the second “spokeswoman
for the.”
17) State Patrol/state patrol — confirm
capitalization; see paragraph 3.
the Communion wafers (Communion is also misspelled);
18) “remarkably” is unnecessary;
19) recalled;
When Bowe came upon a traffic accident.
Bowe, not “Boe”;
unclear what “government” means;
20) Why wasn’t Bowe required to stop at the crash
last summer? It seems Bowe was off duty when he
stopped for the accident. We should say so.
21) mortality
This paragraph should be deleted.
Notes:
The copy editor should find out Bowe’s age. More
should be said about the funeral for the shooter,
either after paragraph 11 or in a sidebar packaged
with the main story. Are there any new details from
the shooting? Are there details about Bowe’s family?
Story 4, page 29
1) “Tom Johannon was jailed without bail in
Lucastown yesterday, charged with contempt of court
...” Either there is nothing to back up this charge,
or it is the wrong charge; the sentence should just
say “charged with failing to pay child support ...”
Connection is misspelled.
the jail official should be named.
delete one of the “yesterday” references to avoid
confusion.
2) extra “n” in Johnannon.
He is called a Fort Smith citizen, but if he lives
in Thomasville, he’s a Thomasville resident
Where did the number “$4,500” come from?
Sheriff’s is spelled wrong
3) The court has (had?) ordered Johannon ...
... of her 4-year-old son (delete comma) Demond.
4) Confirm quote with reporter. If this is a quote,
add quote marks at beginning of sentence. If it’s not
a quote, delete “Mr.”
Johannan is misspelled.
“Lucastown family courtroom” — check style:
Lucastown District Court? “The judge confined
him... — is this part of the quote? Find out where the
quote begins.
“... said Clease, who attended the hearing ...”
(delete “said she”)
Delete the comma at the end of the sentence.
5) “Ewell could not confirm the length of Johannon’s
sentence.” — We need an official to report this, not
Clease.
6) Delete this reference to Johannon’s being a
former welterweight and junior middleweight champion.
Right now, it looks as if Clease is reporting this.
The boxing references come later in the story.
Write “Clease said she was introduced to Johannon in
September 1991 by one of his friends.”
7) “Child support” is not needed in second sentence;
why is this information coming from her?
8) Who is Curry? Should this be Johannon?
“She said Curry began making the payments but
stopped and she has sought help from the courts to
collect the money.” — this sentence can end after
“stopped.”
9) The first sentence needs attribution.
Write out “pro” — professional career.
10) “In January (comma) Johannon ...”
Detroit is misspelled.
The first sentence needs attribution.
11) It’s sufficient to say that Johannon couldn’t be
reached for comment.
Notes:
Many questions of fairness should be raised in this
story, mainly that most of the quotes are from Clease
and there are no solid quotes from officials to back
up her statements or the allegations. There are no
quotes from Johannon.
Story 5, page 30
1) There is inconsistency in the style of Fire chief
Robert Rabyt and Police Chief Bart Kosienski.
2) Missing a period at end of second sentence.
3) “... eliminating 126 jobs, an increase of 24
positions ...” is awkward phrasing and may confuse the
reader.
4) fire and police departments
clerical workers’ should be singular possessive —
clerical worker’s. Even better would be to change “one
clerical worker’s job” to “33 firefighters and one
clerical worker would be lost ...”
spell out numbers below 10 — nine officers.
5) “That’s mighty white of them, isn’t it? ...” This
is a gratuitous quote.
Koseinski spelling is inconsistent. Check spelling.
6) Incomplete first reference for Brandolini. What’s
his first name?
Coalition is misspelled
Municipal is misspelled
“to take the brunt” is a cliche
7) Need some kind of attribution or proof to back up
Brandolini’s role in saving the city money.
8) “We have changed how we paid for it, from a
percentage of claims to cost per person, which is
cheaper,' Brandolini said. There should be a double
quote at the end. This sentence could also be deleted
altogether.
11) “The number one ...” AP Style is “No. 1.”
12) delete Brandolini’s title since it is already in
paragraph 6.
“bare the brunt” should be spelled “bear.”
“bail out the city” — also, avoid using these
cliches.
13) “When the city announced its early retirement
plan, some agreed. That created 34 vacancies, of which
66 percent ... are still vacant.” This needs to be
attributed.
15) Change comma at end of sentence to a period.
17) “If City Manager John Aldi’s ...” — first
reference already given in
paragraph 3.
One mill equals $1 for every $1,000 of assessed
property value;
18) Math error. The average tax increase would be
$700, not $800.
Story 6, page 32
1) Say “5-week-old boy” instead of “5-week-old
infant.”
“... points to possible negligence ...”
2) Delete “the day of.”
3) Delete “up and down.”
Change “his skull” to “Darryl’s skull.”
4) “4-year-old nephew”
Add a period to the end of the sentence.
6) “Lydia/his” — ask reporter whether Lydia is a man
or a woman.
10) May need to add background on the day-care
licensing.
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