comma, period, semicolon?
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comma, period, semicolon?
Using the Chicago Manual of Style (book format), how would you edit the following run-on sentence?
In this section, you will find glimpses into that magical place, the place that I believe exists in every child’s mind, the place where the real magic of Christmas exists, where the physical and environmental realities of this world do not impinge on the Santa’s Wonderland of their imagination, a place where all things are harmonious and joyful.
Thanks.
In this section, you will find glimpses into that magical place, the place that I believe exists in every child’s mind, the place where the real magic of Christmas exists, where the physical and environmental realities of this world do not impinge on the Santa’s Wonderland of their imagination, a place where all things are harmonious and joyful.
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Re: comma, period, semicolon?
Here's what I'd do, just change one comma to a colon and delete two words. I'll chalk up conjunction use (or lack thereof) to the writer's voice and leave it be.
In this section, you will find glimpses into that magical place, the place that I believe exists in every child’s mind: the place where the real magic of Christmas exists, where the physical and environmental realities of this world do not impinge on the Santa’s Wonderland of their imagination, where all things are harmonious and joyful.
In this section, you will find glimpses into that magical place, the place that I believe exists in every child’s mind: the place where the real magic of Christmas exists, where the physical and environmental realities of this world do not impinge on the Santa’s Wonderland of their imagination, where all things are harmonious and joyful.
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